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[Mistakes]

[glow=red,2,300]Comments and critism are great things, they teach you...so teach away!!!
Here is my first attempt at poetry- [/glow]

The Path of Purgatory

You frown, I cry
You breath, I sigh
You speak, I die

I see the path turned wrong
The moonlit rocks are gleaming
Beneath the night time throng
The stars are bright and meaning

I hear the whispered song
I hear what's left of hades
When people walk along
The road that reaks of rabies
diseases, failure

I touch little, if i can help it
The stones are bare and rough
Beneath fingertips, like grit
Hot to touch and to break are tough
Yet as my feet hit the floor
The ground ceases shaking
The world around me drinks up blood
But my heart is still breaking

I smell nothing
there is nothing to smell

Once more the path you set me on
Led me past lingering hope
Adultery and hate, a life has gone
As you cried before the pope
"A witch, I saw it by these very eyes"
Now I curse you, I despise
every breath you continue to take
Ever second is your sellby date
That love you gave was it fake?
Was it fun to play?

I am forever resentful to the man who set me on
The Path of Purgatory[/b]

[Mistakes]

Infinite

Dark and sensous
Voilent and dangerous
Cold and treacherous

A wrinkled hand, older than time
Reaches out
Twinkling eyes, brighter than diamonds
shine from the sky
A beautiful woman, mystery filled
Gives you a smile
Breath of ice,
Whispers its song

The young willow bends
The oak stands strong
The human cowers
And others hide

Her dark hair tendrils out
Smooth and soft
Her bright face gives us our light
Her laugh our torture
She grasps what she can
Dangerous and beautiful
Everlasting
Infinite Queen

Dark and sensous
Voilent and dangerous
Cold and treacherous

[Calli]

Mistakes... your poetry. It gave me shivers. And thats a really good thing! Keep it up sweetie. ;D

[Mistakes]

[glow=purple,2,300]Oh wow, thanks...Heres something a little different...but I dont know, what do tha people think?[/glow]


Un-named

I found you in my life
You were never there before
Close my blinds and open my eyes
Didn’t find the door

I tried so hard to realise
That the love was very real
Every early morning rise
I lived without the feel
Of you near me
Of you so close
Pushed away the heart
Stood at the coast
But denial aint a river
Leading to the sea
I cannot find more fish out there
You were the one that caught me

It took me years to understand
Even longer to reveal
That you were the fisherman
With the tug on his reel
You didn’t pull me in
Did not collect your prize
You denied the fact, you an’ I
It weren’t a big surprise

Breath in, breath out
Breath in, breath out
PLEASE
…breath

[Mistakes]

[glow=yellow,2,300]Ok, so again, this one is really different and finding out what ya peeps think would be luvely![/glow]

MY Sanity Denied

How long have I been looking at the stars? How long have I confided in them as my friends? My family? My sanity? My sanity…well I can only guess too well now, I have no sanity and so I have no stars, no stars no sanity, no sanity no stars, no stars no sanity, no sanity no stars…<br>The walls are clean, very clean, and white. Sterile looking; like a hospital. I hate hospitals. Do you like them? If you do you’re crazy, you should be here not me! Every thing is hazy, I have no time and too much of it…my life is dull, the sparkle that was given to me by the Gods and Goddesses on high has been extinguished by your clean palm.

[Mistakes]

[glow=blue]I am not wanting to be sappy much, but this is one about my deceased auntie...who although dead for many years, im still having trouble letting her go. [/glow]

An unconditional Bond[/u][/i]

I want to let go

You know i do

But everything and everyone

Reminds me of you.

It was my lifeline

I held onto yours to keep me afloat

But in this vast sea of life

You climbed aboard the boat

Leading to new endings, new beginnings.

Wake up from the everlasting sleep that has you in its quake

No not you, i need to wake up from my nightmare

My sanity is at stake

I pay penince for my sins

But Please

Im begging as desperate woman

Child!

To let go my one true hope

So warm and gentle

soft and mild

I'll give you everything I ever owned

She is worth more to me than was understandable

She is my freedom!

[Mistakes]

The wait and watch of a sunrise[/s]

There will be a place for me
In this world
Close your eyes and open your mind
Disorientate this sanity
This sanity is all you see
It keeps you chained
To this world
A passive human
However active you think to be
All it is
It is a chain of commands

Of commands to words
Words to people
People to actions
Actions to...
chains

The worlds chains will one day break
Sunset, sunrise
Releasing All
Releasing...
Itself

There will be a place for me
In this world
When Sanity dies
Until then I wait
I wait and I watch
Watching through your eyes
[shadow=red,left,300]Watching through your eyes[/shadow]

[Mistakes]

[glow=blue,2,300]Could ya'll tell me which of these is the most 'moving' or the best?[/glow]

[Aylor]

Oh, I dunno, I think they're all rather amusing... A tad... anguished, don't you think?

[Mistakes]

[glow=green,2,300]Most of them are annotations to pictures I draw...I guess-yes anguish![/glow]

[Mistakes]

[glow=purple,2,300]Im bored, i make a riddle, you answer riddle ;D[/glow]

I mourn your beginning
And wait for your end!
I feel both hot and cold

I fight you internally
Though outside I'm struggling
But I know that you'll soon be through
Until then my insides are churning


what is it?

[Mistakes]

[glow=red,2,300] :oI have great news, im in a company of twelve and the script writer really liked some of my poems, unconditional bond being one of them and so is going to be using them in her script! ;D[/glow]

[Mistakes]

Seasons 2003

Summer wind and summer breeze,
upon my face upon my knees,
room to sleep and room to play,
all the night and all the day.

Winter cold and winter ice,
It snowed today not once but twice,
No room to play but room to sleep,
As I wade through the snow so deep.

The noise of spring the heart of flowers,
We’ll keep having fun for hours and hours,
We’ve room for play and room for joy,
So much fun no need for a toy.

The autumn leaves orange and red,
All among the ground they spread,
The cold is coming from oh so far,
The clouds now block my special star.

The seasons change with different feelings,
All of them hold their different meanings,
The stars shine brighter, the sunrays fall,
They sing the songs of spirits and all,
But my favorite seasons are autumn and spring,
They bring to mind the life and death everlasting ring.

[Mistakes]

Pagan Spring time prayer 2003

As I sleep among thine flowers,
I think and dream for hours and hours,
I think of joy and hearts to seek,
And not of the weather warm or bleak,
I feel the nature it talks to me,
I answer back and I feel free.

[Crucification]

[glow=red,2,300] Nice peoms [/glow]